lake My desperate dorsimbra - Is it right this time?

Dorsimbra comes from the name of the originators, Frieda DORris, Robert SIMonton. and Eve BRAden, it's capitalised. You've got good metre and form, once you've edited that second stanza, which is snappy free verse that doesn't have to rhyme, unlike the opening Sicilian Quatrain. It does have the iambic pentameter of a sonnet and rhymed couplets in the opener, but that's its only similarity. You've mastered it pretty well for a first attempt. Kudos! Pity it's too late for the contest, you'd have a good chance of winning.there